This is my hand writing sample for Term 2. I didn't do very well. It is a very funny poem.
Somthing I did do well was my border. It has different kinds of animals.
My next step is probably making it neater.
These photos are of our project. The bottom two are of our tri board and the top one is our plants. Going clockwise from top left: Seed Raising Mix; Sand; Mud; Compost.
The thing I enjoyed most about our project was when we got to go to Massey University to see one of Mr Herrings friends about plants.
Our team, consisting of Dionne, Kate and I, were really good at getting our work done, even though we had an occasional fight.
On the matrix, we could get better at nothing, because we think we were expert on everything!!!
Our social action went well. We decide to make a walkway for the school with native trees. When we talked to Mrs Peck about it, she showed us that we already have one, it's just that people don't know about it. So we will probably raise some money to make a proper walkway, not just dirt and grass. We might also try to raise lots of money to make name labels. It could go for years before it is completed, but we will start it.
This is my writing sample for Term 2. It is about our science project. I got level 5 for surface features and level 4 for deeper features.
I didn't know there was a level 5! It must be pretty high!
My next step is in deeper features. It is to support ideas with a range of ideas and data. I also need to use a metophor or simlie lanalogy.
In Term 1 I started on level 55 on the basic facts ladder. Withen 5 weeks, I had gone up 3 steps and finished the whole ladder. I can't improve next term because I've finished!!! Helping Alex helped me succeed because I taught myself the answer while helping him.
For spelling, I started on level 30 and went up 3 steps. I am now waiting to be tested on level 33. Nothing has really helped me succeed. Next term, I would probably do stuff at home, not just at school.
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Your 2nd draft of the 'Oil and Water' explanation showed very clear evidence of the basic criteria, Diana. You have the introduction and conclusion, some good ideas and you've ordered the ideas logically.
I would like to see you structuring your explanation with paragraphs and adding more detail. You could do this by making sure that you've covered many of the WHs.
These are my macro photos I took on camp. The first one is... the carpet in the hall at Camp Highland Home. And the second one is... the edge of my glasses! I learnt that a macro photo is a photo of something close up. I took lots of really good pictures. Next time, I would try harder to get focus before taking the photo.
This is me and my family. From left to right. At back: Mummy, Blake, Daddy. At front: Misty (my rabbit), me (Diana), Joel.
This explanation explains why some liquids mix and some don't.
Firstly, some do mix because they are the same density. Oil is denser than water so it floats on top. They are immiscable.
Immiscable is like when you are playing on the playground. There are girls in one corner and boys in another. They don't want to mix with the different gender, just like the oil.
But you can make them mix. Just put salt in. Salt will push the oil down to the bottom. But when the salt dissolves, the oil floats back up to it's friends. We tried it, and it looked like a lava lamp.
Now you know why some liquids mix and some don't.
This is how the hole appeared in Doug Robinson's paddock in Invercargill. One night, Giant Jump-a-lot couldn't get to sleep. So he decided to get up and, well, jump on the clouds. When he jumped on a rather small cloud, (1m wide and 40cm deep), it fell out of the sky and made the hole. Then Giant Jumpalot jumped and the cloud flew back up. Giant Jumpalot landed back on the cloud and went up with it. Then he went back to bed and fell fast asleep straight away. Because of all the pressure that was put on the cloud, it filled the hole up with rain water. That is how Doug Robinson's hole appeared.
This is why some liquids mix and some don't. As you know, some liquids do mix. It all depends on the density. Oil is denser than water, so it floats on top of the water. They are immiscable. That's like when you're playing on the playground at school. There is a group of girls over there and a group of boys over here. They just want to be with their friends. It's the same with the oil. It doesn't want to mix with the water. That is what immiscable means. But there is a way to make them mix. If you put salt on top of the oil, it will get pushed down to the bottom of the water. But when the salt dissolves, the oil goes back with it's friends. It looks sort of like a lava lamp. That is why some liquids mix and some don't.
I need to: use paragraphs
What happened:
When I entered the room with Dominic, I sat down, facing the computer. I asked for Holiann, but she was at dancing, so her best friend Carly came up. It was 4:00pm in Alabama. We asked each other questions, and it was so fun! I was so excited!
Conversation:
We had a really good conversation, because we gave great answers and asked great questions. I think it was great. Next time, I would actually take turns asking questions.
I learnt that it can be difficult working out the average with lots of numbers. I made the graph really well. Next time, I will try to get the graph right first try. It shows that the boys improved and the girls didn't. Boo-hoo!!!
I remember my most thrilling moment, sitting on the mountain of metal in
I wrote this in writing explorers.
What did Sir Ed do?
As you know, he climbed Mount Everest, but that doesn't make him a hero. What he really did was: served people in need; built schools and medical clinics and many more. He was always helping poor people in Nepal. Even though he was a New Zealander, he cared for people around the world.
Where did Sir Ed live/become a hero?
Sir Ed was a New Zealander, but after he climbed Mount Everest, he spent lots of time around the world raising money for poor people, especially the Shepras. When he came down Everest, he went through Khumjung village, the hometown of most of the Shepras. A few years later, an elderly shepra came to him and said "Our children lack education." So that's where he became a hero.
When did Sir Ed become a hero?
Probably when he started raising money for the Shepras. He must have been their hero! Or maybe when he helped build the schools and medical clinics.
Who helped Sir Ed?
His wife Louise and Tenzing. His wife encouraged him and boosted him. Tenzing was always doing the same. Plus, probably the Shepras, by needing him and being so nice to him. No wonder he wanted to help them!
Why did Sir Ed help the Shepras?
Because it was worthwhile, and it gave him more satisfaction than a footprint on a mountain! He also never felt sorry for them and never tried to impose projects on them. There were just to many requests to say no!
How did Sir Ed succeed?
Sir Ed succeeded in climbing Mount Everest, but he also succeeded in being a great person by caring about people and helping them.
Which H.O.Ms did Sir Ed use?
Definitely persistance in climbing Mount Everst, and taking responsible risks. When helped people, he listened with empathy and understanding.
Conclusion:
Sir Edmund Hillary was a kind, caring man, who never gave up and thought of others before himself.
Dear Diana
How was Term 2?
I hope you got better at your fitness Before you kept getting puffed. I hope you improved on the Beep Test and didn't lose your shoe again! I really hope you practised heaps.
How was sign language? Did you learn any more signs? I hope you did, 'cause now you can talk to Lucy and be understood, as well as understanding her. Plus, you can teach your family some signs.
Well, overall, well done, great work and goodbye.
From your good friend,
Diana
For the PAT Maths test, I got two wrong, one in Number Strategies and one in Geometry and Measurement. Lots of people got them wrong. They were numbers 31 and 37. I got stanine nine. That is the best you can get.
What a great term you've had, Diana! I've been impressed with your self directed style of learning and your extremely high level of independence. You have started to grow in your leadership skills and recognising your strengths as a learner.
I am looking forward to seeing you begin to pass on your skills to others and publish your more of your writing on your efolio. Keep up the effort!
I have learnt about and enjoyed learning about how to make an efolio. I learnt how to embed as well. I really enjoyed it because it was so easy. Mr Herring helped me at first, but now I'm a wiz and can do it by myself really quickly ( as long as the computer is fast!!!) Another thing I enjoyed was learning about lots of graphs and when to use them. I already knew about most of them, but I worked out by myself how to use an Area graph and a Stem and Leaf graph. I didn't get that much help from anyone in working out how. I enjoyed it because I had always wanted to learn about them, especially Stem and Leaf.
Next term I want to get better at adding detail in my recounts, because I don't add that much detail. I try to though. The only person who could help me would be myself.
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This is where I walk when we go down to the Manawatu River.
This is my graph. I have definitly improved my gutterboard skills. Before I could barly get ten!!!
I was selected for a special maths project, where we had to make a flow map to help people work out what graph they need. I like the fact that it had something to do with maths. I learnt about stem and leaf graphs, area graphs and gliffy. This is the finished product! I hope it helps you!!!
We had to change the background to make it look more interesting. We also added more pictures and information. I like the colour of the new background.
